New trilogy. Katty’s trilogy. New book blurb.

I don’t even have a book blurb for that series yet, but I need one. See my blurb studies for previous books here.

My theme for all my writing is hope—whether it’s fiction or nonfiction.

So blurb Katty’s Trilogy: “Katty is depressed. Clarence is busy with his new wife, Mrs. Timm. And Phil is still on the loose, looking for any opportunity to kidnap their little girl. Katty starts drinking to cope and hits bottom—hard. Her daughter Bea, is more the mom. Deputy Mark Scott is dispatched to the trailer. He’s falling in love with Katty and Bea.” 

*** Wait! Delete! Spoiler Alert! That's as far as this blurb can go!***

Kelly Exeter of Level Up Your Writing recommends: First line—ask a question. 

Okay … first try—“What if your child’s father wants to kidnap her and kill you?”

Or … “What if you met an old lady rushing out of the convenience store, and when you get inside to the cashier, all the tiny bottles are gone—the old lady bought them all?” 

Okay, try this … “What’s this book about? Addictions. Planned incest. Abortion. Love. Abuse. Anger. Hope.” 

Or, set a scene.

Katty is willing to leave her four year old daughter to go buy booze. Because that’s the way she was raised. If it was okay for her mom to do that, she figures it must be okay for her.

Sample from Harry Potter and the Philosopher’s Stone:

“Till now there's been no magic for Harry Potter. He lives with the miserable Dursleys and their abominable son, Dudley. Harry's room is a tiny closet beneath the stairs, and he hasn't had a birthday party in eleven years.

But then a mysterious letter arrives by owl messenger: a letter with an invitation to an incredible place called Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. And there he finds not only friends, flying sports on broomsticks, and magic in everything from classes to meals, but a great destiny that's been waiting for him … if Harry can survive the encounter.”

Apply that to my book:

Angels and demons and humans, oh my! 

No.

(Kidding. I hate doing this, so I let myself be goofy.)

Here’s the real deal:

“Till now, there’s been no true love for Katty Randolph. She lives from one tiny shooter of whiskey to the next—trying to escape the voices, the shame and pain. She shares a run-down trailer house with her four-year-old daughter, Bea, in a trailer court with neighbors who make it their job to report any abuse they think they see. 

And Phil, her daughter’s father, tries to kidnap the girl more than once—he is evil.

But the very deputy who is sent to investigate a break-in at the trailer, sees something in Katty that no other man has seen—a woman worth loving. He can offer her safety, companionship, a father’s heart for Bea … if she can believe she deserves that love.

But when she takes Bea to work with her, she unintentionally puts her within Phil’s reach. They are forced to confront past lies and brutality.” 

How’s that? That's a good book blurb or back cover blurb, right?

Okay. One last (but probably not last!) try: 

“Katty’s evil boyfriend tries to kidnap their daughter, Bea. Druggies from Katty’s past want to reconnect—she’s their next free meal. Voices haunt her. ”Mommy, Mommy.” But they’re not her daughter. A cute cop seems interested in her, but she doesn’t deserve that kind of love. She reverts to the only comfort she knows—tiny bottles filled with burning, yellow liquid.”

What do you think?